Flop. I felt the cold hard cement as the gravel crept into my mouth. I felt weak as the cars sped past me. The hope that once filled my heart had vanished. My eyelids got heavier and heavier. My eyes were closing. I heard a horrid sound as I lifted my head to investigate. A car was right before me. I screamed but nothing came out. Hope would not be my saviour.
Andre
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8 comments:
Very scary! I hope that will never ever ever ever ever happen to me!
Andre, nice writting it sounds frightning i do not want to be in that type of sitution! From Hansi
How very very scary.
I like your story!
i really like your descriptive writting. i will be really scared in that situation.
jimmy
I think this story is very scary
Yusrah
i would not like to be in that situation. i liked how you said the gravel crept in your mouth but it can't creep.
I really like your paragraph.I especially liked the way you said how the person lost hope
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